托福考试写作例文20
发布时间：2013/7/26 23:26:48 来源：城市网学院 编辑：admin
Acording to the lecture, examinig closely to the eating habits of meerkats, these amimals are not altruistic, mainly because the sentinel before standing guard eats. So that it has a full stomach. Another fact is that the sentinel, being the first that sees the predator, is able to be the first in escape. Also the other meerkats that are hunting and looking for food are the ones in danger. Considering the altruistic human acts, the donation of body organs shouldn't be considered like that, mainly because when a person donates an organ he or she receives appreciation and recognition of society.
Because of this points the lecture might make the reader doubt, mainly because the eating habits of the meerkats have been studied closely, giving arguments in order to justify that meerkats aren't doing altruistic acts.
The other argument about human and [heir altruistic actions sounds logical and a situation in which a person would donate organs just to get appreciation of society couls be probable.
Because of this both, reading and lecture, are #pletely opposite, might make the user doubt and reflect more about altruism.
Rater’s Comments
This response is at level 3. On the positive side, the response includes all the facts of the sentinel meerkat from the lecture as well as organ donation. However it is very vague in how it relates (see the Level 3 description in the Scoring Guide) the various points in the lecture to the points in the reading. There is no clear reference to the claim in the reading that the sentinel is sacrificing food or any explanation of the other meerkats being in danger. The statement #- menting on organ donation, “The other argument about human and their altruistic actions sounds logical and a situation in which a person would donate organs just to get appreciation of society could be probable,” is not very clear.
